Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether

intelligence

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born

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learning

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whether learning

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is a good way to progress someone's

intelligence

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it may be a natural activity, I believe it will gain by learning. There are a number of reasons why learning is a vital way to develop our

intelligence

. One possible reason is that

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we have to learn anything again and again. It will help us to grab something easily. Another reason is that we can know new things by learning which will help to enhance our creativity and knowledge.

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, we can solve any difficulties in

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efficient way because it makes our brain's

calculation

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calculations

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stronger.

For example

, if a student gets difficult math , she or he will solve it easily because she or he learns how to do it quickly by applying some tips and tricks Despite the above arguments, some individuals are born with

intelligence

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with, some people can do

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task

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within a second without any preparation. As it comes

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them automatically , they do not need any hard work to understand the task.

Moreover

, someone has

higher

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level of IQ (

Intelligence

Quotient) rather than

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person

which we

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extraordinary

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the extraordinary

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person

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represented that,

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human has 85 and 115

level

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whereas

an extraordinary

person

has

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level of

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above 130. In conclusion,

although

intelligence

is a

person

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but

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I would argue that anyone can get it through learning.

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