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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether
intelligence
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 is gotten
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born
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 or
learning
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whether learning
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 is a good way to progress someone's
intelligence
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 it may be a natural activity, I believe it will gain by learning. There are a number of reasons why learning is a vital way to develop our
intelligence
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. One possible reason is that
,
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 we have to learn anything again and again. It will help us to grab something easily. Another reason is that we can know new things by learning which will help to enhance our creativity and knowledge.
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, we can solve any difficulties in
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 efficient way because it makes our brain's
calculation
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 stronger.
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, if a student gets difficult math , she or he will solve it easily because she or he learns how to do it quickly by applying some tips and tricks Despite the above arguments, some individuals are born with
intelligence
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difficult
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task
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tasks
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 within a second without any preparation. As it comes
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 them automatically , they do not need any hard work to understand the task.
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, someone has
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a higher
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 level of IQ (
Intelligence
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 Quotient) rather than
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a normal
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person
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 which we
calls
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extraordinary
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the extraordinary
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person
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, the Daily Star newspaper
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represented that,
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a normal
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 human has 85 and 115
level
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levels
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 of
iq
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IQ
qi
,
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 an extraordinary
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 has
the
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 level of
iq
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IQ
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 above 130. In conclusion,
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intelligence
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 is a
person
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's blessing,
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I would argue that anyone can get it through learning.
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