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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Other believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer andd include any relevant examples from your own kowledge or experience

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Some
people
 claim that students who
study
 in higher education should choose whatever they want
while
 others think they should focus on beneficial departments
such
 as
science
 or tech. I believe young brains should feel free to choose their
future
 path because they would be happier if they
study
 their interests.
People
 who think young
people
 should
study
 modern
science
 or technology think those studies would be more beneficial for the next generations. They are not completely wrong as
science
 and tech are the
future
.
For example
, when a biologist creates a medication, it affects many ill
people
 from all over the world or the new AI developments changed many things in the close past and it continues to change.
On the other hand
, I believe
people
 could choose their
future
 careers depending on their interests because a doctor who doesn't like hospitals or a chemist who doesn't like lab work will be useful to neither herself nor society. It's a fact that scientists are needed all the time but
also
 other occupations are needed
such
 as teachers, artists, plumbers, or firefighters. That means if each student is encouraged to
study
 in those departments other jobs will be needed desperately in the
future
.
Science
 makes our life easier but sometimes
people
 need humans to communicate because communication is
also
 a basic human need.
Overall
,
science
 and technology are undeniably important,
however
Add a comma
,however
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also
 societies need other jobs. So, if
people
 could figure out how they can be happy and choose a path to rely on that they would be more useful for their community.
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