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Nowadays, a lot of people use credit cards for online shopping. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The online
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 shopping is more famous and popular over the world ,
also
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 that development is
choosing
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 by
the
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apply
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most
of
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people
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. These days, many
people
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 utilise
credit
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cards
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 for
new generation
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new-generation
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 shopping.
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 development has a number of benefits,
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but
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however
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 there are
also
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, some drawbacks as well, as
will
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well
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now
noww
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now
 be discussed Turning possible disadvantages are
credit
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cards
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 because these
are create
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a good condition for robbery.
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,
the
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 number of hackers attack
to
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the bank account
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, plenty of moments be unsuccessful.
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,
sometime
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sometimes
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 that event is lucky for hackers.
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, every day many
of
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agencies publish news about cybercrime and give some
precaution
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precautions
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 for
its
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it
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.
Another
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 drawbacks are
money
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 has been virtual
money
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 and
this
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 situation impact to
human's
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human
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 brain
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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people
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 know
the
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that
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 virtual
money
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 is unreal that doing annoy the most of
populations
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population
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.
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, currently time the banks
using
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use
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 customers'
money
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 ,
in
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contrast
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 gain a lot of income and paid a little portion to the customers. That unbelievable action is
considired
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considered
 by humans.
A
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The
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 first advantage is
credit
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cards
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 give cashback at some shopping,
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furthermore
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 some
people
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 work in
the
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a
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 company and earn
salary
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a salary
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 monthly, foremost
the
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apply
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credits
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credit
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cards
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 give
advantage
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the advantage
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that
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is spend
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is spent
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on
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money
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, next
of
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the period is paid back by humans. A second advantage is
the
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that
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credit
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cards
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 provide income and
expense
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expenses
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 so do not need cash
also
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,
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that
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which
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is decline
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the
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theft for the reason the
cards
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 have
special
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a special
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password
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passwords
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. There are some
a
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new superiority
such
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 as
the
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apply
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credit
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cards
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involve
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and
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which
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 give the chance paid household expense because that situation be more
confortable
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comfortable
 for
worker
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the worker
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.
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,
the
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statistic
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statistics
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 companies provide reports annually, so reports are shown many
of
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the
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apply
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people
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 using
cards
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 and
decrease
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decreased
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 cash
operation
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operations
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 every day. In conclusion, the essay
have
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has
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 more advantages in that process, the
cards
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 help to
population
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the population
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for
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with
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 shopping
other
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and other
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 expenses. I hope
a
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the
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 next decade create new packet and discount by
bank
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the bank
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