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Topic: In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

#topic #countries #people #areas
In
this
 day and age, citizens especially want to find some
opportunities
 and change
are
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and are
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 making the move from their rural
area
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areas
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 to the big
cities
 with a desire for a career, a learning opportunity, or a desire to change lives. From my point of view , there are several
reason
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reasons
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 why
people
 migrate to
urban
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an urban
the urban
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area
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areas
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 and the problems associated with it.
To begin
 with, young
people
 leaving is that the business and career
opportunities
 offered in
cities
is
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are
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 appealing.
For example
,
it is clear that
 in Vietnam , many multinational companies
such
 as LG,
Samsung
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and Samsung
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 set up factories in the city
center
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centre
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,
provide
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and provide
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high quality
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high-quality
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 management job
opportunities
 which attract a lot of workers.
As a result
, they can earn
high
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a high
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salary
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salaries
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 to make and meet.
In addition
, big
cities
 have more educational
opportunities
, with better resources and advanced technology.
Besides
 studying in class, students need to search for learning materials from large
library
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libraries
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 to
meeting
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meet
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the
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their
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 learning needs of students.
Moreover
, the city
center
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centre
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 with a series of commercial
centers
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centres
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, bookstores, used bookstores,
many
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and many
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 fun activities, entertainment, shopping... taking place regularly will help students relax after a
nerve racking
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nerve-racking
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 day.
However
, there can be disadvantages
of
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to
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such
 moves.
Firstly
, traffic congestion and industrial manufacturing are prominent features of the urban landscape, which take their toll on the natural environment and those who depend on it.
For instance
, air pollution from both cars and factory emissions
affect
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affects
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 the health of countless urban residents.
Socondly
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Secondly
, crime rates are significantly higher in densely populated urban regions than in rural areas. Because urbanization entails migration or immigration of
people
 from rural areas to
cities
.
This
 can lead to consequences
such
 as an increase in the number of
people
 and the rate of unemployment. In conclusion, with a better economy,
cities
 provide their residents with better welfare. I think the government should
also
 take measures to solve traffic problems
as well as
 crime rates so that
people
 have a better life.
Submitted by phuongthao.3822 on

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