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■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British in different age groups donating
money
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 to
charity
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 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the two middle age groups aged 36-65
years
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 donated significantly greater
money
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 to charities compared to the rest of the population,
while
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people
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 aged 18-25
years
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 made the least donation in 1990.
On the contrary
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,
people
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 aged 51-65
years
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 donated the most in 2010 and teenagers aged 18-25
years
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 gave relatively lesser
money
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 to
charity
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. In 1990,
people
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 in the 36-50 age
group
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 donated 43% of the
money
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 to
charity
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. The grant made by the 51-65
years
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group
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 was 10% different from the previous
group
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.
People
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 aged 26-35
years
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 and over 65
years
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 gave almost the same amount of cash to
charity
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, accounting for around 33% each. There was roughly 28% of donations made by the population below 25
years
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 in the same period. Interestingly, most of the grant was given by the
group
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 of 51-65
years
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 in 2010, just slightly below 40%. The
group
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 aged 36-50
years
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 and above 65
years
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 donated a similar amount of
money
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, accounting for 35% each.
While
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people
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 aged 26-35
years
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 made approximately 24% contribution to
charity
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, the
group
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 below 25
years
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 made the least donation, just slightly above 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, charity, years, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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