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Social networking websites, such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram improve international relationships as people all over the world are free to communicate and exchange ideas to what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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It is undeniable that all over the
world
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people
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 have improved relationships through social networking websites, and the result is that
people
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 are free to communicate and exchange
ideas
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.
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 is because of the easy access that
people
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 have regardless
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 of how wealthy the user is. personally, I agree with the statement that social networking brings
people
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 together, and because of
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this
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 our
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 has improved. Today the Internet has connected the
world
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 even if a country is
under developed
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underdeveloped
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 or not everyone has free access and easy access to social
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.
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 keeps
people
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 from different countries together when
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landlines
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 cannot
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 in a
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 where wars are preventing
people
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 from communicating when they live in
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conflict countries, the Internet solves the problem
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cypress in turkey we're almost 15 years after the war the
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 between the countries still not exist.
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, another reason that the Internet has brought the
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 closer is that it has changed the situation with the TV without freedom of speech could externalize the same
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 again and again, Shonas, right when social
media
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 peers and
people
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 had the chance to communicate share their opinions, even reject the old-fashioned
ideas
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 TV was sharing the
world
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 change for the better quickly suddenly having a device in my pocket, that's sad stories
ideas
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, opinions stories of experiences of
people
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 with a different sexuality, nationality and mindset from us make
people
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 think and even change directions or
behavior
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, homophobia races of the idea of the superior, gender, especially in youth almost do not exist
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people
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 because
people
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 come so close to
understand
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 each other through social
media
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. In conclusion,
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 made the
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, improve by keeping
people
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 connected, and by putting them in a case, where they listen to other communities of
people
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 by making new communities.

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