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Social networking website, such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram improve international relationships that people all over the world are free to communicate an exchange ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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There is no doubt that the rapid development of social networking
websites
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 contributed to bringing
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 from all over the globe together to socialize and exchange ideas and opinions, I personally believe that
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 has become more common
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 various factors, and can be beneficial to the majority of
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 on
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 planet.
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 with social media,
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 are free,
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 easy to access.
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 means that everybody can use it to exchange opinions and share their thoughts with
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 from all over the
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, those platforms are programmed to adapt to a row liking some preferences
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 we have the opportunity to easily meet
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 with the same interests as ours.
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, a recent study has shown that almost 3,000,000,000
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 use social networking
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it is obvious that
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 from all places are a part of just one community.
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 actively demonstrates that everybody's able to meet and communicate with humans from every corner of the
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.
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, the use of social media
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 has led to the creation of international relationships.
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 it can be beneficial to
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residence
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 of a Third
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 country
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 the fact that they can ask for help by presenting actively the circumstances they live under.
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, the social network can be
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 way for communities to raise awareness for important problems that affect millions of
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 on the planet more specifically the recent events in the USA have led to the organization of the Black Lives Matter movement, which has a dramatic number of online users Participating from all over the globe.
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 social platforms have obviously a high impact on international relationships and can contribute to making the
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 better.
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, everything that has been stated so far social networking
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are
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 clearly major factors that help to build up global relationships and
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people
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 from all around the
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, the freedom of speech and expression I completely and utterly agree with
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 and wish that it keeps bringing
people
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 closer in the near future.

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