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Extreme sports that are dangerous like skiing and rock climbing should be banned. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#sports #rock
Dangerous
sports
 are a method for humans to feel
powerfull
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powerful
, pushing themselves to
the
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their limits. Some people believe that these activities should be banned as they are extremely dangerous .
Fristly
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Firstly
 I obviously agree
on
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 the danger that people face doing extreme
sports
.
Therefore
, most of the
times
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, there are
not
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no
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 safety measures and
this
 results in high death rates every year. In
addittion
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addition
, natural environments are transformed to create an ideal place for extreme
sports
.
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because
beacuse
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Because
 of
this
 phenomenon the fauna changes and migrates and in some cases it is
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extinct
extincted
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extinct
On the other
hand
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 there are
also
 some people who argue that banning extreme
sports
 could
results
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 in a drop in the economic system.
For instance
, skiing
represent
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 an important source of profit
especially
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 for
mountains
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 areas and local companies ,
as a result
 of banning
this
 sport many mountains area could close, increasing the unemployment rate in the country. I strongly believe that dangerous
sports
 should not be banned because of the economic results
it
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 can follow, it is still fundamental that the government improves the safety systems and
moreover
 protect the local fauna.
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