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It is true that many children enjoy using smartphones. However, by overusing mobile devices, children’s communication skill development and precious family time will be reduced.

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High technology devices
such
 as smartphones play an important role not only in
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 but
also
 in the new generation
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 life. Some might support that
smarphones
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smartphones
 provide opportunities and useful knowledge to these
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children
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.
In contrast
, the number of
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 released IOS or android games increased sharply through these years.
This
 number indicates that more and more
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children
 used their phones for entertainment purposes.
For example
, surprisingly, my nephew’s
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 shows 3 times higher than that
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mine, mostly on an online streaming platform.
While
 many people show no concern toward
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 opposite idea. There are several negative consequences
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 from overusing a mobile device in
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. Because watching live streamings and playing games are one-way communication,
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 will not be able to develop their social skills properly.
For example
, a
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 adolescent could not fluently express his or her ideas in class.
Moreover
, time spent on these devices will run over precious time with their parents. Through interacting with real people,
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 can learn new skills
such
 as speaking and listening.
For instance
, when I was young, my mom used to read me bedtime stories. Currently, influenced by those story books, I love to read
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 of books, fiction or non-fiction. In conclusion,
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even though
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 communication tools are
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 and useful,
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because young kids are blindly overusing these innovations,
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 a negative impact
instead
 of a positive one.
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