The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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The two maps show the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day . In general, we can see from the visual that the building experienced both external and internal development . To start with , the external changes involved the repositioning of the entrance which was at the south to relocate to the left side in the west of the building .
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, the back garden was shrunk in comparison to the previous map and the building was expanded at the expense of the garden ,
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, the car park at the south was developed to occupy 30 cars . Moving on to the internal development, in the northwest , a Minor operation room and extra CR place have been introduced ,
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, the reception room was relocated to the left side of the entrance and combined with the Children`s play area as new facilities ,
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the physiotherapy place experienced no change.
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, the open area was enlarged in size and relocated to the middle of the building .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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