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In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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People
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 from some
countries
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 have
chance
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the chance
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 to import a diversity of
food
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 from all regions of the world.
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case
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 presents many advantages for
people
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 as healthy nutrition and balancing their domestic market.
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, sometimes it leads to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
food
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 production as a negative aspect. The first advantage of
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 situation is
improvement
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nutrition
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the nutrition
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 of individuals.
People
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 can vary their appetites with
variety
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a variety
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 of foods and it would give positive effects
to
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 their health. To illustrate that,
people
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 who consume less varied foods may confront more health issues in their entire life
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 biology
scientist
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scientists
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. In
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 perspective, varying their appetite is beneficial for
people
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.
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,
this
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case
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 presents
good
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a good
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 impact. The second advantage of
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 phenomenon is suppressing some product values in local markets.
People
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 sometimes suffer from high values of goods in markets
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insufficiency
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the insufficiency
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 of goods’ storage. With these imported goods, their
prices
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 can be held steady and shopping
of
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for
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 these goods may be alleviated in the long term.
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, in winter times, Northern
countries
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 may supply more vegetables than
summer
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in summer
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 times in order to avoid possible grocery
crisis
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crises
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.
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, in order to have consistent
prices
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 in the market,
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 application can assist
countries
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. The negative aspect of
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case
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 is
possible
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decline
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to decline
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 in agricultural
productions
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production
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.
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 importing these foods may show
positive
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a positive
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affect
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effect
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in
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on
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prices
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, in the long term, it may harm domestic production. Farmers and other actors in
food
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 manufacturing may reduce their activities and retailers might become more dependent
to
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on
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 exterior
countries
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. These circumstances might lead to a crisis in reaching
of
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apply
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basic
food
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 needs and
prices
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 may be boosted.
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, agricultural labourers may become unemployed
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lack
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a lack
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 of production. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied in
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case
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. Even though,
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case
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 may bring critically detrimental effects, in my opinion, its advantageous sides
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 as better nutrition and
decline
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a decline
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 in goods’
prices
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 overweigh the disadvantageous side. 43 dk.

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