31. Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ages. But in the current era of
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and technology, there is
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debate about the importance and need of
schools
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can replace
schools
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organized, need specific and personalised instruction which is needed at the initial stages of education as
schools
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are organized in terms of their planning, operations and improvement practices. Schooling being the very
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initial
stage of
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academic career needs properly planned activities presented in an orderly manner.
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is
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diverse
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set of activities without a proper institution. So,
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school
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are needed for
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proper schooling even if they are in a distant or online mode.
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is exceptionally rich in its
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resources
but it still
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replace
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schools
.
Students
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but
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related
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resources
.
Students
are not capable enough to filter these resources suitable for their level.
Schools
help to align these
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resouces
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resources
in a suitable manner. Most importantly,
schools
are the institutions where
students
can get one on one information, they can ask questions to solve their queries.
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can not provide
such
instruction to younger
students
.
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is very diverse in its nature but it simply cannot replace
schools
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can help to improve instruction but cannot serve as a complete medium for initial education and learning.
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