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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for children's future.

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It is natural for parents to want the best possibilities for their child including education. Nowadays, the most popular way to teach pupils anything is by teaching elementary
subject
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. There are people who think learning difficult skill sets
are
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 better in terms of
children
's
of
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future. Others think different things are useful for
children
's future. On the one hand ,
children
's abilities are useful for their development. When
children
 become
adultsb
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adults
, they apply
theoretical
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knowledge
 they have learned in school in their working life. If
children
 are not given subjective
knowledge
, they cannot compete with their peers. To get higher education,
children
 have to pass natural talent tests or
interviews
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various
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 universities depending on previous studies.
On the other hand
, schools are the best place for
the
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children
 to learn new skills.
Teachers
 are very important in
children
's life. Because
,
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 they educate the youngsters for a better future.
In addition
,
teachers
 teach
children
 practical
knowledge
.
This
 is because
such
knowledge
 cannot be found in books.
For example
, when you play football at school, the
teachers
 tell you how to build a team . And communication skills can be learned by talking to people. In short, schools should include various programs to develop the next generation. In conclusion, I believe
this
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 practical skills and theoretical subjects are of equal importance. Schools should maintain a balance between teaching practical
knowledge
 and theoretical subjects so that
children
 can benefit from learning both.
Thus
 ,
teachers
 should make sure that students are given both educations.
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