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Newstories on Tv and newspaper are occupied by many pictures? What's your opinion about this?

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Nowadays
news
 stories on Tv and in newspapers are full of many
pictures
. That's definitely true and,
moreover
, it not only distracts from getting important
information
 but
also
 makes it artificially longer. There are
also
 some points about that. The first point is that
pictures
 are not always used in an appropriate way, and it makes an impression that the newspaper or
news
 story is cheap and gives you false
information
. That's a big problem for corporations. Many of them do it to make their product look better, but the real picture is controversial,
instead
 of looking good it looks overwhelmed with lots of useless
information
. Next point is that
pictures
 are likely to be advertisements, and it can cause negative feedback from users because it's a really annoying thing. And even if it's not annoying, it may seem to people that the
news
 story is made to sell something to them. which is
also
 frightening to human beings. And the
last
 point, but not least, is that it can be low-quality
pictures
. On the one hand, there is no matter if the quality is good or not if the picture contains important
information
. But
on the other hand
, if a picture is about nothing, and
also
 is of poor quality, it will have a disastrous effect on the company, which produced that newspaper or
news
 story on Tv. Generalizing, I want to say, that if there are an awful lot of
pictures
 in it, it always looks overwhelming and can cause a decline in users. But if the company found a happy medium,
pictures
 became extremely beneficial for them, because people will fall in love with that product.
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