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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist's work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist's work after five years.
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The following chart illustrates the destination of
anthropology
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 graduates from one university.
In addition
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, the following table demonstrates the
salaries
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 of the
anthropology
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 in
work
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 after five years.
Overall
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, the biggest
percentage
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 of the destination of
anthropology
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 is full-time
work
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 52%.
In addition
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, those who graduated in
anthropology
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 can
work
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 3 kinds of sectors
such
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 as freelance consulter, government sector, and private companies. The
percentage
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 of the government sector and freelance consulter have increased after 5 years.
To begin
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 with, the maximum destination of
anthropology
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 graduates is full-time
work
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 at 52%. The second-ranked is part-time
work
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 at 15%. The third-ranked is unemployed at 12%. The fourth-ranked are full-time post-graduate study and unknown at 8%. The
last
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 one is part-time
work
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 + postgraduate at 5%. The biggest
percentage
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 of
salaries
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 about 25,000-49,999 is private companies at 10%. In 50,000_74,999, The biggest
percentage
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 of
salaries
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 is private companies at 35%. In 75,000_99,999 The biggest
percentage
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 of
salaries
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 is freelance consulter at 40%. In the upper ,100,000 The biggest
percentage
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 of
salaries
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 is the government sector at 50%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, salaries, work, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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