The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
graph
illustrates the changes in the
number
of
shops
that closed and newly opened from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, fewer
shops
were closed between 2016 and 2018 than between 2011 and 2014
while
there was a downward trend in the
number
of new
shops
.
According to
the
graph
, the
number
of closed
shops
was relatively higher regardless of some fluctuations seen from 2011 to 2014. Starting at 6200 in 2000, it reached a peak of 7000 in 2013.
However
, it experienced a dynamic drop to hit the bottom at 200 in 2015.
Then
, the
number
of closures accelerated suddenly in 2016 when the
graph
remained stable at 5000 until 2018. Regarding the
number
of openings, there was a fewer
number
of
shops
newly opened for the 7 years.
Although
as many as 8500
shops
started new businesses in 2011, it reduced dramatically by half in 2012.
Also
, it is interesting to note that almost an equal
number
of
shops
were closed and opened in 2014. After that, the
graph
continued to follow a declining trend except from 2015 to 2017 when the
number
of new businesses remained unchanged at 4000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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