Despite a large number of gyms, sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest?
It is clear that
, nowadays, opening a numerous number of gym centers
, Change the spelling
centres
although
the slow pace life
is becoming popular in the modern world.
Change preposition
of life
To begin
with, it is undeniable that, many people who
are addicting Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
social media day by day. Change preposition
to
This
is because,
a number of entertainment apps gaining Remove the comma
apply
a
popularity Remove the article
apply
between
individuals. Change preposition
among
In addition
, despite a
many gyms, they are Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
preferring
spend their time on the internet. As an example, my friend Add the particle
topreferring
who
is always online on telegram Correct pronoun usage
apply
whole
day. In my opinion, Correct article usage
the whole
like
that Correct word choice
apply
situations
originates a lot of number of unemployed in Fix the agreement mistake
situation
the
society, and simultaneously they Correct article usage
apply
are
force themselves to do idle Unnecessary verb
apply
works
. Fix the agreement mistake
work
According to
national
report agency, many people spend Correct article usage
the national
their
big part of their life on the internet, especially the younger generations organizes many Change the word
a
portion
.
Change to a plural noun
portions
On the other hand
, I believe that,
we can tackle the global problem easily if the government approach Remove the comma
apply
with
clarity and humility. Correct pronoun usage
it with
This
is because,
the ministry Remove the comma
apply
play
a leading role Change the verb form
plays
to
Change preposition
in
this
reform. To quote from, there are had
enough solutions for these issues, as Unnecessary verb
apply
an
example, take Correct article usage
apply
a
limit Correct article usage
apply
to
everyone's mobile traffic, and reward Change preposition
apply
the
people for their beneficial activity, Correct article usage
apply
such
as support with money for their steps. Because of this
, it is helps
Change the verb form
helps
to
all Change preposition
apply
generation
Fix the agreement mistake
generations
for
brush up Change preposition
to
their
balance of life and stability, Change preposition
on their
as well as
, it is essential for healthy
lifestyle.
In conclusion, as I mentioned before, there is had a lot of ways to reduce the problem. For that, we should approach Add an article
a healthy
to
these problems with clarity, and I believe, Change preposition
apply
this
reforms will Correct determiner usage
these
helps
us to remove malicious habitsChange the verb form
help
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