Despite a large number of gyms, sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest?

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is becoming popular in the modern world.
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a number of entertainment apps gaining
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many gyms, they are
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spend their time on the internet. As an example, my friend
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society, and simultaneously they
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force themselves to do idle
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clarity and humility.
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balance of life and stability,
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lifestyle. In conclusion, as I mentioned before, there is had a lot of ways to reduce the problem. For that, we should approach
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us to remove malicious habits
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • health problems
  • weight gain
  • obesity
  • energy levels
  • chronic illnesses
  • mental health
  • productivity
  • focus
  • social isolation
  • exercise
  • physical fitness
  • active lifestyle
  • health benefits
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • leisure activities
  • regular physical activity
  • physical exercise
  • cardiovascular health
  • strength training
  • flexibility
  • endurance
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