The advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way Positive or negative development

New
products
are
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to consumers more often and more detailed than before. Highlighting the
products
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new
fatures
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features
can help guide
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customer
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customers
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and encourage healthy business
competitions
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. In today’s highly competitive world, fresh innovations are created and advertised almost weekly.
Such
rapid updates can cause
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overolad
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overload
and confusion in consumers. Many
companies
solve
such
issues by
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their updates over and over on commercials
such
as on television or radio. Take Apple as an example, the brand repeatedly
advertise
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about
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its new
feature
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on
their
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Iphone
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iPhone
such
as
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resolution screen, longer battery life, and shorter charging time. Using these
informations
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, buyers make the best decision for themselves.
On the other hand
, from
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perspective. By emphasising updated features,
competition
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rate
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among
companies
within the same industry can increase. Because they want to raise their sales and attract more customers,
companies
that were repeatedly informed about other
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new
products
will actively create newer and better items.
For instance
, the competition among big technology
companies
such
as Apple, Samsung, Huawei, and Xiaomi is very
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. Based on the consumer’s needs, introduced mobile devices became more and more high technology and beneficial for consumers.
For example
, the newest update on iPhone can recognise
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face with
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on.
This
improvement not only fit the current pandemic situation
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but
also
signal other rival
companies
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brilliant idea. In conclusion, highlighting the
products
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new features can help with
consumer’s
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decision making
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and encourage
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among businesses in the same industry.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • novelty
  • excitement
  • latest trends
  • improvements
  • advancements
  • differentiating
  • competitors
  • innovation
  • progress
  • attracting attention
  • generating curiosity
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