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The pie charts shows how many hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates, and all student.

The pie charts shows how many hours spent in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates, and all student.
The pie charts
shows
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 how many hours
spent
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are spent
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 in a British university library by undergraduates, postgraduates, and all student. It is clear from
research
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 that
post graduates
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postgraduates
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students
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 spent more
time
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 in
library
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the library
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 than either total
students
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 or other
students
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. For
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, the overwhelming majority of those who are
graduates
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students
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 spent at least fifteen
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time
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times
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 per week in comparison with average
students
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. The
figure
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were
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 51 per
cent
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 and 15 per
cent
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 respectively.
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, only seventeen per
cent
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 of total
students
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 spent
time
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 in
library
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the library
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 between one to seven hours,
whereas
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 the average for all
students
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 in
this
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 category is a hefty 50 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, for
undergraduates
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,undergraduates
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 the pattern appears to be slightly different. The least
time
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 spent
eight
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was eight
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 or more hours per week (37 per
cent
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), but out of
this
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 total 53 per
cent
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 spent sixteen or more, which
almost
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is almost
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 a third of the corresponding figure for postgraduates level
students
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, time, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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