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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compared the
percentage
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 of the main reasons why people immigrated and emigrated to the UK in 2007.
Overall
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, the most common reason for both immigration and emigration was
definite
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a definite
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job
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, which had an approach
percentage
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. 

Starting with immigration, the definite
job
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 was the highest proportion, with 30%,
in addition
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, the reason
of
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for
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 formal study had a similar
percentage
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 with the definite
job
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, with 26%.
In contrast
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, no reason stated only made up 6%, which was the lowest
percentage
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 throughout all of the reasons. Looking for work, accompany and other had around half of
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of formal study, with 12%, 15% and 11% respectively.

 Moving onto emigration, 29% of British emigrated from the UK because of
job
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 definition. There are
also
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 22% of residents
move
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who move
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 out
the
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of the
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 UK owing to look for work.
However
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, the
percentage
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 of formal study only consisted of 4%, which was the lowest
overall
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 for the given items.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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