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Some people believe that unpaid communities service should be a compulsory part of high School programmes (for example working for a charity,improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people have
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 in saying that unpaid community services should be made mandatory in high schools I completely agree with
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 statement because it built up
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confidence
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 creates opportunities for them to discover goals in life volunteering helps
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confidence
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 some of the students are not good at the academics because they are not interested in
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teaching
 them singing,dancing and other games like cricket and football helps them recognising their talent .
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, in 2005 Brazilian Government organised many talent Hunt programs in schools
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free of cost to introduce and improve volunteering skills among
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.
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result
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 they found many classical singers,dancers,
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and cricketers
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 and decided to make a team of each category to introduce them at an international level.
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 serving their communities helps
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 find their aim in life many of them do not know why they have to go to school to learn subjects they do not even like.If School management
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 volunteering class and make it mandatory for everyone to join especially in
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 and winter holidays,
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found
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 helpful in many ways, like they are attracted towards their
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 subjects.
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, organising trips in which they go to polluted areas where they
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 by teachers about
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the plantation
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 and make sure every
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children
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 to
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 a tree by their own hand. It would definitely
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 towards their mission because by helping
community
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the community
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 they become very passionate and want to grow up to become people who can solve
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 huge problems. Once they have
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 goal ,they would even become passionate about
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 studies,that even help them achieve it In
conclusion
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 it is essential to
inugurate
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inaugurate
integrate
 community services in schools.For one
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children
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self
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self-confidence
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confidence
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 and for
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other
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 they can get a Moto for life

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