Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high School programs (for example working for a charity improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports youngsters).To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people have confidence in saying that unpaid community services should be made mandatory in high schools.I completely agree with
this
statement because it builds up Linking Words
children
Use synonyms
self confidence
and Add a hyphen
self-confidence
also
creates opportunities for them to discover goals in life.
volunteering helps Linking Words
children
build self-confidence.Some of the students are not good at their academics because they are not interested in it. Teaching them singing,dancing and other games like cricket and football helps them Use synonyms
recognising
their talent.
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recognise
For instance
, in 2005 Brazilian Government organized talent Hunt programs in schools free of cost to introduce and improve voluntary skills among Linking Words
children
.Use synonyms
As a
Linking Words
result
they found many classical singers,dancers and cricketers and decided to make a team of each category to introduce them at an international level.
Add a comma
,result
In addition
, serving their communities helps Linking Words
children
find Use synonyms
theiraim
in life. Many of them do not know why they have to go to school to learn subjects they did not even like.Correct your spelling
their aim
their
For
Linking Words
example
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,example
if
School management Correct word choice
apply
initiate
the volunteering class and Change the verb form
initiates
make
it mandatory for everyone to join Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
specially
in winter and summer holidays.So they can do whatever they want,Replace the word
especially
this
may increase their extra skills other than academics.
Linking Words
furthermore
, organising trips in which they go to polluted areas where Linking Words
the
taught by teachers about Correct your spelling
they
plantation
and make sure Add an article
the plantation
children
Use synonyms
to
plant a tree Fix the infinitive
apply
by
their own Change preposition
with
hand
.It would definitely rises their interest towards a particular mission because by helping Fix the agreement mistake
hands
community
they become very compassionate and want to grow up to become people who can solve world huge problems. Once they have Add an article
the community
this
goal they would even become passionate about Linking Words
their
studies Change the pronoun
the
that
can help them Correct pronoun usage
which
achieving
it.
In conclusion,it is essential to inaugurate unpaid community services in schools, for one Change the form of the verb
achieve
thing
it Add the comma(s)
,thing
increase
Change the verb form
increases
Use synonyms
children
self-confidence and, for Change noun form
children's
other
they can get a Moto for life.Correct pronoun usage
another
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