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Online shopping is replacing the shopping in stores. Do you think it is positive or negative?

#stores
Technology plays an important role in human life
as well as
 making it very easier and more convenient. Nowadays online shopping became trending. I think the advantages are more outweigh the disadvantages.
However
,
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate on both notions and will lead to a logical conclusion. Without any qualms, through online shopping
people
 can purchase quality
products
 at cheap rates.
Secondly
,It saves the time of
people
along with
 transportation money. Another pivotal aspect of
this
,it's delivery is very fast
people
 get things in just 4-5 days, The option of cash on delivery payment is safer.
For instance
, in past decades, we buy
products
 in so much rush
as well as
 at expensive prices but these days we don't need to
wait
Add the preposition
forwait
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 it saves a lot of time and
people
 do their shopping at home without any worry.
Thus
, buying
products
 from online websites is more useful for every human being. In another school of thought, many
people
 who do not use online websites prefer offline shopping from stores.
In addition
, there are so many fake social platforms available on the internet which sell fake quality
products
. To quote an example, once my brother purchased online headphones at very costly but when he received he was totally disappointed because the wires of the headphones were broken.
As a result
,online shopping is not beneficial every time
along with
 many
people
 are
also
 dependent on offline shopping. In conclusion,
Although
,
According to
 the argument aforementioned, stores cannot be replaceable with online shopping because still there are many individuals are trust stores
as well as
 many
products
 are not available online which we can purchase in the market.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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