The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The given bar graph reveals percentages of
people
that
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multiple social
media
sites in 2014 and 2015. X-axis represents percentages of
people
who used social
media
, Y-axis demonstrates different numbers of
websites
.
Overall
, most
of
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the
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people
used only 1 website
both
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in both
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years. And five
websites
used
least
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the least
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.
Tendency
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The tendency
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to multiple website usage was increased in 2015. It is true that
people
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the people
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who didn't use network sites slightly decreased by %1,
for
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%22 to %21.
People
who spent their time
at
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only
a
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website fell from %36
to
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%
28
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to 28
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in 2014 and 2016 respectively. In 2014, %23 of society used only 2
websites
, and a year later rose by only %1. Three and four
websites
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websites'
website's
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users ratio increased over time and reached %16 and %8 by order. Those who succeed to use five
socail
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social
media
sites doubled in a year and reached
to
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%4. It is obvious that
people
improved their social
media
usage over time and they were
abled
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to use more
websites
in a year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, media, websites with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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