You have visited al bidda park and you loose your watch during play in the park. Write a letter to the manager park and describe what happened. Give the details about the watch and provide your contact information to reach out you when they found the watch.

Dear madam/sir I have visited al bidda park and I

have

Unnecessary verb

apply

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lost my watch. I request you to return

Change the pronoun

the

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watch that I lost

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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when was looking for a shop. The watch was Rolex and silver

colour

Change preposition

in colour

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.it cost 1.2 million riyals .My phone number is 8997339 if you have noticed

watch

Correct article usage

the watch

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please

return

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itreturn

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. Thank you. Your faithfully Ryan

ck.manshad

Mar 31, 2023

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

59 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Many people think dangerous sports should be banned. Do you agree or disagree.