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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying to alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is said that in recent years, an increasing number of
people
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 who have some health disease are preferring other
medicines
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 with a unique method of treatment
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 of visiting their doctor. I think that
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 is an absolutely negative development for several reasons.
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 with the current occasion, these days,
people
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 prefer to go to other medical centres in order to get unusual treatment
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 take these methods of treatment from their usual
doctors
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. I think that a number of
people
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 who have some health
problems
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 go to their relatives who work as a doctor in order to solve them. But, others go to the
doctors
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 who could 100% believe them. Because of
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, it would be safe and affordable.
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,
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 are becoming gullible.
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 means that if they watch kinds of advertisements about other popular
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, they go there very quickly as much as possible.
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, they could face some
problems
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 after they participate in other
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 passed away. Because of
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, in popular
medicines
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 work a huge number of
doctors
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 have great finance.
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, they passed a serious exam with the help of money. In my opinion, it is not a good idea that
people
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 start to go to other stranger
medicines
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instead
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 of going to their
doctors
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. As I can see, the medical field is growing significantly.
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 of
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, the majority of students who are teenagers are becoming interested in
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 field.
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 means that lies could become common,
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,at the time of examination, the majority of students accepted jobs with the help of money.
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, when those
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 face the situation in order to save
people
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’s lives, because of the lack of knowledge they could make something unforgivable. In conclusion,
people
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 who have health
problems
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 go to strange hospitals that could solve the
problems
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 with unusual treatments
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 visit their usual doctor. In my opinion,
this
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 is an absolutely negative development for several reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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