It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Nowadays , more and more people start to believe that some children can be born with any talents, but
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there is an opinion that an average child can become anyone. I support the second view and I will prove my opinion in
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there are many examples of people who could not achieve their goals without innate skill.
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, many footballers , volleyballers or other sportsmen would not be who they are now without their innate indicators.
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, Michael Jordan who is about 2 metres high would not be a basketball star without his height .
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there are actually many examples of individuals who went from zero to hero without any help or innate skills. In our world where there are very strong competition (especially in business) and an individual should have very strong motivation , money or very good social skills to become a successful businessman.
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, Lay Tsun , who is a very successful Chinese entrepreneur and owner of
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technological company called “Xiaomi” started his career growth as a cook at KFC , where he made about 7$ per hour.
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, after 20 years and very hard Chinese
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he became the owner of one of the most expensive companies in the world because of his strong desire and motivation. It can be concluded that if a person really wants to achieve
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success he’ll do it. And there it doesn’t matter about his innate factors. I support
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position because I think that I haven’t got any special skills and I will achieve all my success through my own labour
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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