The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent. The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar graph compares and contrasts the proportion of
people
using multiple social networking
sites
per day , which is measured in percentage over a 2-year
time
period from 2014 to 2015.
Overall
, most individuals
spended
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spend
theHighest
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the highest
amount of
time
on one site compared to other categories .
Whereas
, the least spending was on five
sites
.
To begin
with, 24 % of
people
utilised their data only for one site in 2014.
However
, after one year
this
rating
had
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a fall of 8% in their popularity in 2013, which was 28%. Meanwhile,
people
who watched no site and two social media
sites
had
almost
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same
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the same
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amount of
time
consumption in both years and it was 22%(2014) and 21%(2015) for no
sites
and 23% and 24% for two
sites
respectively.
By contrast
, the
time
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for three
sites
and above only account
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%
viewship
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viewership
views
in total
both
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time
period .
However
,
people
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the people
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who utilised
time
for five
sites
was
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comparatively lower during 2014 and 2015, with 2% and 4% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sites, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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