The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent. The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar graph compares and contrasts the proportion of
people
using multiple social networking sites
per day , which is measured in percentage over a 2-year time
period from 2014 to 2015.
Overall
, most individuals spended
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spend
theHighest
amount of Correct your spelling
the highest
time
on one site compared to other categories . Whereas
, the least spending was on five sites
.
To begin
with, 24 % of people
utilised their data only for one site in 2014. However
, after one year this
rating had
a fall of 8% in their popularity in 2013, which was 28%. Meanwhile, Unnecessary verb
apply
people
who watched no site and two social media sites
had almost
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the almost
same
amount of Correct article usage
the same
time
consumption in both years and it was 22%(2014) and 21%(2015) for no sites
and 23% and 24% for two sites
respectively.
By contrast
, the time
spending
for three Replace the word
spent
sites
and above only account 16
% Change preposition
for 16
viewship
in total Correct your spelling
viewership
views
both
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for both
time
period . However
, people
who utilised Correct article usage
the people
time
for five sites
was
comparatively lower during 2014 and 2015, with 2% and 4% respectively.Change the verb form
were
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sites, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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