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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts depict local bureaucratic spending for several sectors in 2010 and 2015 In 2010, the education sector was the most local expenditure budgeted by the government with a percentage of 24%, and slightly similar to Healthcare at 21% as the second position.
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the Defence and Pensions have allocated just under 20%.
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, the rest showed sectors
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 as Transportation, Interest borrowing, and others have expended just under 10%. Compared with 2015, Education was considerably still the most expenditure by local government but has slightly declined to 3%. Unless
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 outlay was relatively similar to the previous period.
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, Transportation and Interesr borrowing sharply increased around doubling. Since culture and leisure and others were the least bureaucratic spending of local government in 2010, in 2015 their position was relatively similar to the previous year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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