The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the diagram describes the process of sugary production from
sugar
cane. We have 7 steps that , we face both simple and complicated work
Firstly
carbohydrate cane growing up for 12 to 18 months.,
secondly
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they are harvested by farmers or developing machines. After ,that they are crushed and
also
converted to juice.
The next step is
purifying juice. in
this
,stepThe substance from which
sugar
is produced is purified by a limestone filter and they come out of it by drop as well.
then
the
sugar
rod is evaporated by heat and the juice becomes syrup.in the next ,step
sugar
pole is centrifuged and carbohydrate crystals are separated from the syrup.,
finally
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they are dried and cooled and
sugar
is produced. in ,conclusion
sugar
production from
sugar
cane has 7 steps and the longest stride being the first. in the second ,stride we can use only combine or other complicated machines to speed up the work. In
this
,process different instruments are used to make a high-quality product.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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