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Countries ate becoming more and mote similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

#countries #mote #people #products #world
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Nowadays,
people
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 are easily getting the same products in their daily life around the world.
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,
countries
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 tend to be more and more similar than ever before, which has attracted numerous controversies and drawn the attention of the public. Some
people
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 hold the view that it has heaps of advantages
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 others do not think so. In my eyes, it is not a good thing to see
countries
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 tend to be more and more similar than ever before.
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, it has been argued why I think
countries
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 have
tendency
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a tendency
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 to be more similar than ever before.
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 positive aspects must be taken into account like it makes
product
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products
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 cheap and convenient to buy so
people
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 have kind of the same topic with
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 bond,
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, I still believe it has in many ways damaged
people
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's lives.
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, one New Zealand artist once said:'' It is quite boring to buy
same
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 items anywhere in the world, which is absolutely not good for
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innovation
.
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, creating a new idea
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does
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 not happen frequently
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this
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enviroment
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environment
. It is
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 clearly shown that it is not a good idea to see
countries
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 tend to be more and more similar than ever before.
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, another factor that should be considered is
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a cultural
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reason
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reasons
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. As far as society
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is
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 concerned, the ultimate aim of
society
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the society
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 is to spread different cultures.
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, one recent article published in Nelson Magazine revealed that different products stand for different cultures.
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, culture is impressive because it is unique and attractive. Undoubtedly, it is a clear indication that it is sad to see
countries
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 tend to be more and more similar than ever before.
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, I hold the view that it is bad to see
countries
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 tend to be more and more similar than ever before given the reasons outlined above. In order to address
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 issue,
people
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 and the government should make a concerted effort to find a solution.
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