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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a school career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your option.

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It is often argued whether pupils should start their
career
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 after tertiary level education or just after their schooling .
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 there are some
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 opportunities after school level , I believe that there are a lot of job opportunities if students are having their university academics . There are fewer
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 options after school level . Some youngsters are not able to pursue their higher studies
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 their low financial situations . So, they start to do minor kinds of
work
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 right after completing their schooling.
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, many youngsters start to
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 in kindergartens or at some local shops in order to fulfil their economic needs .
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, I think that school grades are not fully enough to achieve a better
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 in nearby future. Universities or colleges offer a wide range of bachelor’s and master's degrees to their candidates . If pupils will be able to do these studies
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 they will surely get the high salary jobs right after their graduation which would be
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 helpful for raising their living standards.
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, learners who qualified from a university are more passionate about their
work
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 and they are more aware of their lives.
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, 99 per cent of bachelor's and master's individuals are seen to be working under well-known firms ,nowadays .
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 reason, I believe that university qualification is much more important for a pupil's life . In conclusion , despite having some kinds of paid
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 , I believe that higher education is more important in order to acquire a better lifestyle and an appropriate passion .
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