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Is learning to speak a foreign language as important these days as it was in the past? Write an essay giving your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days the global is open to each other and we have multicultural, the ‏phenomenon that
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 in
this
 decade is known as globalization.
Firstly
, being interlanguage is so interesting and it's helping you a lot in your life. To illustrate, now knowing new people so easily and learning different kinds of languages have massive benefits in connection with them and achieving
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new knowledge. So, I think now learning a foreign language is crucial in
this
 period more than in the past. Because now with the internet and globalization as we see.
Also
, in the past every
nation
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 their industrial and culture haven't spread to any
another
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 nation because the travel as we now were so hard and
also
 the communication
therefore
, every country
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 their own activity and their cultivation, language.
To sum up
 we could say that the
essential
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 of learning a foreign language
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depends on the tense and life's demands and development that happens.
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