Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In the 21st century, the majority of individuals prefer to interact with each other virtually rather than face to face. In my opinion, both approaches have positive and negative aspects.

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idea, if humans can not say what is inside of them, they can not show their feelings, we will record and show it through social networks.

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, in 2019 scientists in Europe did experiments on some people and couples. The goal of

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experiment was to learn how someone may tell calm from within them and

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life problems, and we are able to feel without hassle and relief.

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, the community can make friends on social networks.

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why, people want to communicate via social media.

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way, nations are not able to know everything about their interlocutor’s characters. Some people hide their negative sides.

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useless side as, if there is a long distance between parents and their son or daughter, they will hide or not tell each other problems. Another negative side, they are keen on socialising online more than in normal communities. They may prefer virtual friends more than their parents and relatives. which is why they may miss links from real life. In conclusion, we are not able to bring to a stop talking and socialising online and in real life. Both have benefits and positive sides.

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Your essay shows some relevant ideas but lacks clarity in expressing them. Make sure to organize your thoughts and provide specific examples that clearly relate to your points.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a basic introduction and conclusion, but it needs more development and connection between the ideas. Work on structuring your essay in a way that leads the reader through your argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

social media platforms
online interactions
virtual communication
global community
interpersonal skills
digital divide
cyberspace
virtual presence
social networking
mental wellbeing
digital literacy
safe spaces
marginalized groups
face-to-face communication
socialisation

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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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