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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. What extent do you agree?

#government #money #railways #roads
Nowadays, public transport should be considered more than before
due to
 climate change. Many argue that government should invest money
on
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 railways than roads. I completely agree with the statement train lines are
benifical
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beneficial
 for both society and
environment
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.
This
 essay will articulate
agreement
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point
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 in forthcoming paragraphs.
Investigaing
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Investigating
, money in railways could have a major effect on
people
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 safety. Recently, many pressers
written
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 that
mostly
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inviduals
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individuals
 are died
due to
 road accidents. If
administration
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construct
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 subways majorities use train line for travel
instead
, of using private transport.
Furthermore
, trains are faster than
the
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road transportation. To be more precise, vehicles on road
faced
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 traffic problems and waste their time on
roads
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 and not reached at
destination
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at
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time
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. Considering some
overpoints
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over points
overprints
 in favour of
a foremost paragraph trains
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 generate a very less amount of pollution it has
huge
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 capacity to carry the passengers than buses and cars. To epitome,
emittions
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emissions
 of
gass
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grass
 form automobile vehicles are the main root of causing air pollution if people used railways for travel numbers of private
transporte
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transport
 will be reduced and air become less contaminated. To recapitulate, trains cover
large
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distance
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distances
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 in
short
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 time and reduce the
accients
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accidents
 ratio from the roads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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