Government should spend money on railways rather roads.

Roads
and railways both play a vital role in transport.
Therefore
many argue that
Government
should invest more
on
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railways
instead
of
roads
. I completely agree with the
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statement
, trains can accommodate more
people
than the others means of transportation. I will manuscripts,
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points in the forthcoming paragraph
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To commence with, Investing money
on
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railways
are
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benifical
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beneficial
for society. To elucidate,
people
used private transport for travel for
reached
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destination
at
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time
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. If mostly used own transport than numbers of vehicles on
roads
and level of traffic will be increased.
Howevere
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,
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train
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can accommodate more
people
. If
government
spend money on subways
people
used
train
lines for movement
thus
the traffic on road will be reduced.
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,
benifits
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benefits
there are many drawbacks a person who missed his
train
don't
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reaches
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at destination on time.because the schedule of
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train
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is very tough to fellow rather than he used
roads
so
government
should pay attention on both
roads
as well as
train
lines. To recapitulate, some
people
used
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road
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for
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and others
train
line
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so
government
should spend money on both equally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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