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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
#maps #show #bookstore
The 2 pictorial maps give information about a bookshop and how
this
 facility has changed after
introduction
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 of several facilities for the students or other people.
Overall
, there has been a dramatic alteration in the number of bookstore
rooms
, namely the non-fiction
room
 has changed to the cafe and the number of tables
apper
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appear
paper
 in the centre of the bookstore between 2000 and now. Before the replacement took place, the bookshop, which was included some services for the visitors. The travel, the new books and the service desk
rooms
 were located
in
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at
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 the building entrance. There was
very
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a very
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 large fiction
room
 on the top and again one small fiction
room
 next to it. The visitors could use little
rooms
of
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 enjoying activities,
such
 as art, hobbies and cookery.
Furthermore
, there was
also
the
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a
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 non-fiction
room
 in the southernmost part of the shop. Remarkably, by now, even though a lot of changes have been carried out there, some
rooms
,
for
example
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 new books, travel and service desk
rooms
 have been unchanged.
Firstly
,
cafe
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the cafe
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 appears to
eating
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of
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visitors.
Then
 lots of tables have been created for readers and the fiction has been
became
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becoming
become
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a
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apply
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small which has been included relaxing
rooms
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rooms, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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