Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. others, however argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it ,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. .

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Some
people
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have confidence in saying that each kind of
crime
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ought to possess fixed
punishment
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,
while
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on the other hand
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, some claim that before deciding the
punishment
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each individual should be asked about the reason for
its
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crime
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and
give
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punishment
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according to
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its severity.
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, giving
same
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the same
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kind of
punishment
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to everyone would bring an environment of injustice and inequity.
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, the fear among
people
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about
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crime
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increases and they would try to avoid short-term
crimes
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which ultimately decreases the number of
crimes
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.
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, many
people
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think that if they do robbery so they will not be charged
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huge punishments. They believe that they can pay some fine and get themselves off from
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prison. If all punishments are equal they will not be able to do so, knowing that they would have to suffer from many difficulties. Even though, it is
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good to give
punishment
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by keeping in view the circumstances and the motivation to commit a
crime
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.
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, a person killed in
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can not be compared to a serial killer.
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, to some extent, it can be seen as negative.
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, if someone has a chance to convince the judge and by any
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they
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succeed in it, so it would be unfair to the opposite party or victim. From my perspective,
punishment
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should be equal for all
crimes
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either,
it's
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whether it's
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a robbery or murder because it will produce fear in the heart of
people
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and make
themselves
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them
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away from
crime
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In conclusion,
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hearing someone's excuses is good, I believe that
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organizing the same kind of
punishment
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for all
crimes
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helps to stop the ratio of
crimes
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by putting scariness in individuals' minds and hearts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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