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The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Two pie charts illustrate different ways of
communication
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 training used by
people
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 from an international corporation and why they chose to learn
communication
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 skills.
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, it is apparent that the figure for staff who participated in part-time training at night dominated among five types of choices, and the majority of
people
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 took
this
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 training for travel purposes. In terms of five types of
communication
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 training, the number of
people
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 engaged in part-time training accounted for the largest proportion, including 22% of them studying on weekends and 39% of employees learning
this
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 course at night.
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, distant training classes enjoyed the least prevalence, at merely 5%. It is
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 worth mentioning that the percentage of employees who preferred to study on their own occupied 22%, almost doubling the proportion of workers who studied intensively, with the figure of 12%. Turning to the reasons for staff to take part in those lessons, 46% of them regarded it as a preparation for their holiday trips,
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 17% of
people
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 learnt
communication
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 skills for business trips.
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, there was a negligible difference between the percentage of
people
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 who studied out of interest and that of those who needed to contact their clients, with the former at 14% and the latter making up 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words communication, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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