Employers somtimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information. Such as their habbies and interests, and whether thay are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, Companies ask
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individual data like
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hobbies
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of interest
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candidates as part of the job application
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opinion of some people that
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details
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I believe that keeping
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personal data
at
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the
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situation
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the
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both
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of the statement in
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hand,The institution might be
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work during
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professional hours.Out of the work period , Beyond
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this
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worker
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can be miss used and sometimes
life
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risk.The workers have their personal
life
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.How would they deal with themself and others,
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their personal choice.
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the higher officers take the
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and harm of the employee
situaion
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situation
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exploite
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exploit
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them negetively
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negetively
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negatively
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, A young female staff who had submitted all her
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got harassed by the seniors. She got
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frequent
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to keep
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relationship going against
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the
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will and wish of her. Ignoring the desire of the boss,She had murdered.
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life
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risk to disclose all the information to the office.
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.The Organisation keeps all the
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of the candidate.Through the
profile
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the
superviser
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supervisor
or supervised
worker
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get
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an idea of the
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co-workers
not
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only know the potentiality but know behaviour ,psychology,likes and dislikes,
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of the
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result
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helps to deal with the
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and
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easy
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emergency
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emergencies
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either physical or mental health
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issues
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happen at the
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in case, It would be
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easy
to communicate to
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the concern
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concern
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family and
friend
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friends
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or the
persons
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health
details
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are very much needed.A clear instance is that In India,The truck
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was driving the vehicle and
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slippery
the truck got
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with a bridge Bars and the
driver
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was seriously injured and he had taken to the hospital.The traffic police informed
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the truck
driver
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's company and from the personal file of the
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they could know the health
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which helped
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the dr to start the medication quickly and could save the
life
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informed the family members about the accident.
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personal data helped a lot. In conclusion,Keeping personal
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information
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at
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the
jobside
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job site
Jobsite
is part of the procedure to
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recruit
,
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cases it is
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,
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however
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I
belive
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that it is
essencial
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essential
and needful
many a times
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many times
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.The company should keep
these information
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this information
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confidencial
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confidential
for
the
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safty
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safety
reason.
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