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Band 7

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _______,

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Dear Peter I am existing to tell you I will come to Melbourne to start my university in monash. I know you live in Melbourne for five years, so I think you may help me find a part-time job during my uni time.
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 with, I will arrive on 13/11, but my orientation week will be after I arrived a week. here is my study plan and class schedule so that you can help me find a suitable job. I am already selected my timetable online, normally Monday to Thursday 9am-4pm, as you can see I will be free after 4pm or Friday to Sunday.
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 is all my uni schedule,
also
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 I will achieve a document of my timetable that you can look up easily. As you know I never live in a city where can speak English, if I can work with local people that will really help my English,
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Change the punctuation
apply

The punctuation in ,, is incorrect. Consider changing the punctuation.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

otherwise
Add a comma
,otherwise

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase otherwise. Consider adding a comma.

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 it is hard to understand what the teacher saying. On other hand, I know you are very busy during the workday and I do not
towant
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want

If you don’t want towant to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

disturb your work. if you know an application
to
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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finding
Change the verb form
find

The to-infinitive that follows the verb know requires the base form. Change finding to the base form.

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 a job, I will lovely to download it. Thank you ,Peter All the best 23/7/2023

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