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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problem are trying alternative medicine and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor Do you think this is positive or negative development

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It is believed that a number of
people
 with health problems are trying
as
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an
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alternative medications and therapies rather than
visting
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visiting
usual
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the usual
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doctor
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doctors
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. In
may
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my
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opinion
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this
 is negative development as there are several reasons. On the one hand,
people
 usually go to
hospital
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the hospital
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. Before
people
 do not know
treatment
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 system for them.
Therefore
,
people
 went to the doctor back in the day.
However
, a lot of
people
 are treating themselves
at
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these days. In my opinion, They are stumbling in
this
 way. Definitely, they should go to the
doctors
 when they will be
patient
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patients
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.
This
 is because
doctors
 can treat every
diseases
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. For
instanse
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instance
, Britain's woman
headache
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 and drink
embarrassment
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 drugs.
As a result
,
this
 woman died. Actually, she had a tumour in
brain
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her brain
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.
Thus
, if
people
was
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an illness
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illness
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, they should go to the hospital.
On the other hand
, When humans are
patient
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patients
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 and they don't go to the hospital, they may
be
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die.
As a consequence
,
people
 will die or
disable
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be disable
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. So,
people
 ought to
be go
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go
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 to
doctors
. And if
people
was
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were
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illness
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ill
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 go to
doctors
,
Doctors
 may
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be unemployers
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unemployers
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unemployed
.
This
 point is very terrible.
This
 is because
doctors
 have their
family
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families
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,
children
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and children
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. They should raise
family
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their family
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. If they do not raise,
as a result
, children and
wife
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wives
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 or
husband
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husbands
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 might die from starvation and aridity. So
people
 should visit
to
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doctors
 when they will be sick. In conclusion, a number of
people
 are trying medicine and treatments
on
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for
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 health problems
instead
 of going to their usual
doctors
. I believe
this
 activity
are
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is
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 very useful for
people
.
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