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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The development of technology has changed the way
people
 communicate in the workplace, so
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online
communication
is now be
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 more common than the traditional way. In my opinion,
this
 transformation brings more advantages than drawbacks. Regarding disadvantages, switching to
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online
communicate
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weakens
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 the bond between colleagues. As
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physical
interacts
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 are declined,
people
 will have less time
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connect
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 with others than before.
For instance
, some activities like coffee during break times will no longer exist.
Consequently
, weaker links will have
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 negative effect on the teamwork ability of
people
, as they do not understand others clearly.
On the other hand
, there are numerous benefits of online
communication
 compared to
face-to-face
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meeting
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meetings
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.
Firstly
, the work will be more
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. As the exchange for work can be done
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anywhere at
anytime
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 thanks to
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technology,
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business will be more convenient.
For instance
, when the business has troubles,
people
 can host an online meeting immediately
instead
 of having only real-world
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meetings
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in
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the
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office hours.
Moreover
, it is easier for officers to access the information. In detail,
people
 can store and use the data they need as a digital file
instead
 a bunch of
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, which will
also
 help to reduce the company’s expenditure.
Thus
,
although
 there is a
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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, online
communication
 brings more advantages to the business. In conclusion, I believed that
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online
communication
 has more benefits to the workplace as it makes the work more
convenience
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to
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 the worker. Even
then
,
people
 should still have
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time to bond and understand each other more in order to increase the ability
of
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 teamwork.
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