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Questions 1. Some argue that all famous entertainment TV programmes shoulde contain education on social issues. *To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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house
 protection from
a
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flooding
on
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 specific areas.
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, it could be some places in Japan or other places, which are surrounded
with
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water
.
First
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 diagram is about a stopband idea. That
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 to some dumb that serves
a
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barrier. The stopbank
made
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from
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few
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 parts. Top of it is the freeboard that gets
strength
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 to that construction. At the bottom is the floodgate and the berm on the other side, that filtering
water
 and doesn’t lets the construction swim.
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 on the other side of a
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 it could be a trampling, from where precipitations are falling to internal ponding.
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 the same time,
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the building
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building
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 should be grounded on piles. That system
also
 is used on hydro electro stations. There is the second variation to protect your
house
,
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 but without the stopbank. The
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 is
also
 in a large of piles. In that situation level of internal
water
 is higher. To lead all roles the
house
 floor should be
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300 mm from
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 level upper.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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