Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

According to
some people's opinion, kids should be responsible for some extra tasks
out
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of school and
education
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the education
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process
while
others believe that it is not an acceptable thing because
children
ought to be free.
This
essay will discuss both of these sides and my own opinion will be given. First of all, the
the
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sense of being responsible for something has
the
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apply
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positive results to have
completed
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personality. Actually,
this
behavior
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must be formulated from
the
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a
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young
ages
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age
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.
Therefore
,
children
and little kids should help at home
as
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cleaning, cooking easy food, working in the garden,
doing
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and doing
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shopping on their own. These types of
labor
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help to increase
senses
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sense
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of competency,
accuracy
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and accuracy
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in talking with other people and managing their
time
on their own.
For instance
,
children
in
Japan
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schools have different tasks at schools after
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the lesson
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lesson
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lessons
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as cleaning restrooms and classes. Second of all,
children
also
should have free
time
to
have
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a
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rest, relax after lessons and enjoy
with
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themselves with
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friends. Evidently, free
time
activities are important for mental health
developing
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in
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young ages.
This
is
also
beneficial for motivating and involving in
study
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studying
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little kids.
Moreover
, it's necessary to integrate both education and enjoying
live
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life
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for increasing productivity in spending
time
from young
ages
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age
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. As an example, free
time
tasks, doing
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a hobby
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hobby
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hobbies
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and just resting
procedure
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procedures
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are used in countries with
developed
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the developed
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education
system
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systems
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. In my point of view, both extra responsibilities and having a rest are the main factors for growing up youth because it is impossible to
became
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a person with
self control
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facilities without all live knowledge. In conclusion, we should bring up
children
,
teach
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and teach
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them all
necessary
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the necessary
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skills and knowledge of life to provide their bright future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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