The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The given line chart depicts the proportion of

people

Use synonyms

using 4 different types of transportation media to access news namely: TVs, newspapers, radios and the

Internet

Use synonyms

Overall

Linking Words

while

Linking Words

the popularity of the

Internet

Use synonyms

increased, others did not. Look at the graph for more detail, more than two third of

people

Use synonyms

watched

news

Add an article

the news

show examples

TVs

Fix the agreement mistake

show examples

in 1995, it was the main source for

people

Use synonyms

to receive information, and significantly decreased to 55% in 2000. In spite of an increase to almost 60% in 2000,

this

Linking Words

figure rapidly decline and it is expected to reach

Remove the article

apply

show examples

half in 2025.

Otherwise

Linking Words

, the percentage of

people

Use synonyms

who read newspapers and listened to

Correct article usage

the radios

show examples

radios

Fix the agreement mistake

radio

show examples

witnessed a similar trajectory, from 55% and 52% respectively in 1995 to around a third in the year 2020. These statistics are forecasted to suffer a continuous trend to reach 30% and 22% respectively in the next 5 years. Despite the appearance of the

Internet

Use synonyms

in 1995,

this

Linking Words

figure rose minimally to 3% in 2000. The ratio of

Internet

Use synonyms

usage rocketed to approximately 40% in 2020 and

expected

Add a missing verb

is expected

show examples

to reach a peak of 57% in 2025, surpassing

televison

Correct your spelling

television

to become the most popular media.

thanhvinhdoi338Sat Apr 01 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words people, internet with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.

▼

4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

193 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
Some children spend hours every day on the smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many perspectives revolve around whether children spending hours daily on smartphones contributes to a positive or negative development. Personally, I witness more shortcomings than advantages. In the following, I tend to discuss in terms of interpersonal and neurological aspects with evidence from current social trends and research.
6
band
Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?
People’s destructive influence on the earth’s ecosystem is exterminating many species and disrupting biodiversity. This essay will discuss two primary causes for this loss, and then put forward the solutions to this phenomenon.Two elementary factors contribute to the extinction of many species. The most prominent reason lies in habitat loss which is caused by deforestation, pollution, global warming and overpopulation. Take global warming as an example. Coral reefs which are biodiversity hotspots will face extinction if the current rate of global warming continues. Overexploitation of natural resources is another cause of this loss. When human activity, pertaining to harvesting and capturing, such as farming, hunting and fishing, is excessively intense in a particular region, resources become exhausted. For instance, many medicinally important plants like Aconitum sp., Drosera sp., Dioscorea deltoidea etc. are disappearing rapidly due to the consequence of merciless over-collection....
6.5
band
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor, do you think this is a positive or negative development?
More and more people gravitate toward alternative medicine rather than conventional methods of doctor's prescription. Although the former might be beneficial, I am of the opinion that its downturns overshadow its benefits.
6.5
band
Globalization has allowed people to work and live in any part of the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, globalization has made us connected with many people around the world, and it has been facilitating our ability to work and live in any country. This essay will discuss whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this development.
8.5
band
2020-01-11: Task 1 You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: •express your apology •why you could not meet •making arrangement to meet him.
I'm really sorry that I was not able to meet you on the 27th of last month at Infocity in Bangalore.

The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources.

Some children spend hours every day on the smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor, do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Globalization has allowed people to work and live in any part of the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

2020-01-11: Task 1 You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: •express your apology •why you could not meet •making arrangement to meet him.