The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate how working adults allocated their
time
for different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, working adults spent the majority of their
time
working,
while
travelling to work and going out took up the least
amount
of
time
in 1958 and 2008, respectively.
Furthermore
,
while
the
time
spent relaxing, sleeping, and going out decreased, the opposite was true for the other activities. In 1958, working occupied almost a third of the day (33%),
while
sleeping accounted for slightly less
time
(32%). At that
time
, socializing with friends and family made up 19% of the total
amount
of leisure
time
. Only 16% of the
time
was devoted to the remaining activities, including commuting to work, relaxing at home, and pursuing other interests or playing sports. 50 years later, the
amount
of
time
spent working rose by 9%,
whereas
that spent sleeping fell by 7%.
While
travel
time
to work experienced a fourfold increase to 8%, the
amount
of
time
allocated to going out has significantly dropped to 6%. The
amount
of
time
spent unwinding at home and engaging in sports or other hobbies went up by 5% and 2%, respectively.
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