Some people think that people are responsible for their happiness. Others feel that happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both sides and give you opinion?

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some
people
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think that achieving
happiness
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is in the hands of
people
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, others argue that there are common needs to achieve it. I agree with the latter view. On the one hand, I agree that being in charge of our own
happiness
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is necessary
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our daily
life
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.
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, we always need a sense of
happiness
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for our work, education and
psycological
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psychological
well-being. Most
people
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think it priority to be happy
that
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which
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allows them to be satisfied with themselves and to have a reasonable quality of
life
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. If
people
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pursuit
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happiness
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from other factors,
such
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as having more money and being famous, they might find it difficult to satisfy their own psychological
fulfillment
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. Nowadays, teenagers,
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, are known for choosing their job
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how much money they could earn, but that does not always provide them with enough
happiness
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to live satisfactorily.
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, I believe that other considerations play
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important role than one's sense of
happiness
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.
Firstly
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, having a safe place to live and enough food
are
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extremely important. Having a pleasant
life
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is surely related to meeting our basic needs.
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, many
people
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's feeling of
happiness
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comes from
relationship
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their relationship
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with their friends and family.
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, being alone does not bring
happiness
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.
Another factors
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could be financial health and social background. In conclusion, self-
happiness
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certainly affects
people
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's quality of
life
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, but I believe that other factors are
also
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crucial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-reliance
  • Positive psychology
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Well-being
  • Mindset
  • Personal choices
  • Environmental factors
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Emotional resilience
  • Quality of life
  • Subjective well-being
  • External circumstances
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