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In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. What do you think is this? What do you think can be learned from this?

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In previous years, the boost of the economy have flourished the
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 of many
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 of underdeveloped and developed,
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, the latter was not joyous as they are in years before. In
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 increased and
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 is more in the developed
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 that aim to become even richer. No quality of
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 type of working industry since they will be preoccupied with tons of
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 on their plates and always on the edge. Like the
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 in corporate businesses, they tend to forget to give themselves a break because of the pile of reports to be done and they often extended their hours in the office.
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, they will be home late tired, and exhausted causing them unhappy with the way they live.
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, underdeveloped nations, since they had a chance to see the happenings in their neighbouring state become resilient and content with their economic success will no longer be shaken by its impact.
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 in developed
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 should Learn to prioritize and manage time wisely. Create a
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 balance
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-balance in order to experience a quality
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 that money cannot buy, and not allow their success to
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 control over their
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. In conclusion, I would argue that economic growth significantly impacts both
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 making them richer, and it has a negative effect on the developing country to
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 that they were no longer happy because of a lack of
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-balance to keep up with the
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 must prioritization and time management to give themselves a quality of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Material wealth
  • Affluent societies
  • Social cohesion
  • Isolation and loneliness
  • Work-related stress
  • Professional expectations
  • Aspirations and reality
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Consumerism
  • Comparison
  • Life balance
  • Mental well-being
  • Community relationships
  • Sustainable development
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