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Some students decide early in life to pursue vocational careers that involve cooking or baking. For them, it is better to study their chosen occupations in high school rather than regular subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Job-related
career
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 are chosen by some students at a tender age that includes cooking or baking and they believe that replacing the
core
subjects
 with occupational ones is a wise decision. I certainly disagree
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 the given notion and
this
 essay will discuss the logical points that support my disagreement.
Firstly
, neglecting major
subjects
 and opting for
career based
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 ones can narrow down
the
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career
 opportunities in the future.
This
 is because,
core
subjects
 like mathematics, science and languages are imperative to learn which assist in securing better employment and are imperative for personal growth. Vocational
subjects
on the other hand
 focus on a particular skill set which certainly
minimize
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career
 opportunities.
For instance
, a child learning cooking and avoiding important
subjects
 will find it very difficult to switch his profession at a later time in his life.
Secondly
, exposure to practical skills
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 early age can lead to mishappening.
This
 means
,
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 a child's hands are not steady to work with dangerous equipment used in cooking and baking.
For instance
, youngsters can end up burning their hands
while
 cooking or baking.
Also
,
due to
 lack of ownership
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in
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 early age, children can overlook turning off the cooking gas or over which can certainly lead to a serious mishappening.
Core
subjects
on the other hand
 do not involve any of
such
 risks.
Hence
, it can be dangerous In conclusion,
i
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 certainly disagree that youngsters should incline towards a vocational
career
while
 overlooking the
core
subjects
 which can land them into trouble and narrow their carrier opportunities
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